By Andrew E. Kaufman
A while back, I did a post about sex scenes: I said they had no place in thrillers. I also said I’d never put one in my novels.
Then fate gave me a double-barreled shot of whoop-ass, when I realized I needed to have—you guessed it—a sex scene in my upcoming novel. There
was absolutely no way around it. Darkness
and Shadows is a psychosexual thriller, and you can’t have seduction
without sex. It’s kind of like a cone without the ice cream. Won’t work.
The whole point of the scene is that the protagonist’s
love interest becomes emotionally vulnerable after their encounter and
reveals something about herself she normally would not. This sets up the premise for the entire plot.
After realizing there was no way to avoid this, my next step
was to write the scene without losing my reader (and my
credibility). When I finished the chapter, however, I was surprised to find it actually worked. Here’s where my learning curve took me. I'm fully aware this is going to sound like an instruction manual, but I'm keeping it as clinical as I can, folks.
If you’re going to
add sex, it should be crucial to the plot
There has to be a specific purpose for a sex scene. Why? Because anything less
will come off as gratuitous, if not pointless. Much like violence—or any other element, for that matter—if an action doesn’t drive the plot forward, it’s excess weight on the reader's mind. I know my sex scene was necessary because I ran
hundreds of other scenarios through my mind (I was earnestly looking
for a way out), but none came close to being as effective. So perhaps a good
question to ask yourself when considering whether to add sex to your novel would be: is
there a better device I could use to make my point? If the answer is yes, lose it—if not,
go for it.
You don’t have to
name every part
At first, my scene was just one big hot mess. Seriously. I don’t need
to give the details here, but what I realized was that none of the explicit
details were necessary; in fact, they undermined what I was trying to
accomplish. Since we’re talking about plot/character-driven elements (i.e.:
purposeful), the scene wasn't about what the characters were actually doing—it was about their individual motivation. It was about the people, not the parts. Which brings me
to the next point.
Focus on the
emotions
Since the purpose of the scene was to advance the plot, what
actually mattered was what the characters were feeling and thinking. The act itself was a vehicle—not an actual road. So, when I revised the chapter, I focused instead on what was going
through my protagonist’s mind (since we’re in his POV) as well as the words and
actions of his love interest, so I could set up for the big reveal when she
finally pulled back the curtain and uttered those ominous words.
Keep your characters
in character during sex:
Yes, people do act and speak in ways they normally wouldn’t
when they’re sexually aroused, but we’re talking plot here, not real life, and it served no purpose to have my characters express themselves this way during my scene—in
fact, it would have only distracted from the point I was trying to convey in
the first place. Another thing I had to pay
attention to was my narrative (which again, is from my protagonist’s POV).
Using explicit language in my prose would have been out of character for
him, and in effect, would have bumped the reader out of the story.
Sex is generally
fast—the scene should be as well.
Yes, I know there are exceptions, but if you’re writing a
thriller, everything has to move quickly, and this kind of action is no
exception. Since the scene occurs as a flashback instead of in real-time, I didn't have the luxury of going on and on (and on). Memories are fleeting. Even memories about sex.
And after polling my readers, I found that most don’t want sex scenes in
their suspense novels, but most stated they could tolerate one if it didn’t go
on for pages and pages. So my scene moved rapidly but realistically. I made my
point, made sure the reader got it, then I moved on. The entire scene
took up three-quarters of a page.
It's not always what they do—it's what they don't do
In other words, sometimes it’s not what’s actually written
on the pages—it’s what stated between the lines. The reader will get it.
They’re smart. In addition, if there’s a budding romance between characters, the tension
building between them can be even more provocative than actually having them fulfill their needs. If you write it correctly, the reader will feel it as
well.
Deep breath.
I think writing this post (and avoiding the inevitable innuendoes) was more difficult than writing my actual scene.
What are your thoughts?
